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What is Plain Language? Part 5: The Nitty-gritty

February 15, 2022 | Filed under: Aaron Dalton and tagged with: Aaron Dalton, communications, literacy, plain language, writing
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This is the fifth and last in a series of articles discussing the basic principles of plain language by Aaron Dalton.

I offer two half-day workshops: the first is all about the why and then we look at some document-level issues like tone. This is the workshop that I am most passionate about and try to get in front of as many employees as I can. The more mechanical parts that I am going to summarize here are relegated to a second workshop that is still useful and valuable but is not where I want authors to spend too much energy. This is because the editor can fix many sentence-level issues with minimal intervention from the writer. But what the editor can’t do is actually write the document.

By the time a document comes to me, there is limited time, and the project team — who may have been working on the document for many months — has limited energy for back-and-forths. I have to balance many competing interests (see my earlier blog post on this problem). So what I want authors to spend the most energy doing is drafting the document with empathy. I like to call my teaching efforts “proactive editing.”

But there is an interest in the finer-level mechanics, so I’m happy to teach them. These won’t be new to my fellow editors, and you can find a great deal of material online about any one of them, so I will simply summarize here.

Structure

  • Get to the point: Make your document title explicit and use the “inverted pyramid” approach as much as reasonable for the document as a whole and for each individual section.
  • Use descriptive headings: Your table of contents should tell a story. Prefer headings that describe content, not function (e.g., choose “Issues with Pipeline Right-of-Way” over “Problem Definition”).
  • Use topic sentences: Each paragraph should have a specific point to make—a purpose. That purpose should be made clear within the first three sentences.

Sentences

  • Prefer shorter sentences.
  • Keep subject and verb close together.
  • Minimize the passive voice.
  • Minimize negative phrases.

Words

  • Minimize jargon.
  • Prefer shorter words.
  • Avoid noun strings (e.g., mineral surface lease renewal application form guide).
  • The main action of the sentence should be expressed in the verb. This will naturally eliminate unnecessary nominalizations and lead to using stronger verbs.

Further reading

  • The Craft of Research, Fourth Edition by Wayne C. Booth, Gregory G. Colomb, Joseph M. Williams, Joseph Bizup, and William T. FitzGerald (University of Chicago Press, 2016) [A seminal work on scientific writing specifically, but applicable to any research endeavour.]
  • Legal Writing in Plain English, Second Edition: A Text With Exercises by Bryan A. Garner (University of Chicago Press, 2013) [Good way to get a sense of defensible changes in legal writing.]
  • Expectations: Teaching Writing from the Reader’s Perspective by George D. Gopen (Toronto: Pearson Longman, 2004) [Completely changed the way I teach.]
  • Writing for Dollars, Writing to Please: The Case for Plain Language in Business, Government, and Law by Joseph Kimble (Durham, NC: Carolina Academic Press, 2012) [Useful, concrete case studies.]
  • Stylish Academic Writing by Helen Sword (Harvard University Press, 2012) [Excellent text for academic writing.]
  • Plain Language and Ethical Action: A Dialogic Approach to Technical Content in the 21st Century by Russell Willerton (New York: Routledge, 2015) [The BUROC framework and discussion of the ethical implications of plain language.]

Finally, I’ve gathered research, case studies and links to other resources on subjects of interest to editors in my collection “Empirical Research for Editors.”

Are there any plain language tips you would add? Any resources you’ve come to rely on?

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Previous post from Aaron Dalton: What is Plain Language? Part 4: Craftsmanship

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Written by Aaron Dalton

Through an eclectic career that spanned hospitality, software localization, computer programming, and musicology, Aaron learned firsthand the power of audience-centred communication. He currently works for the Alberta Energy Regulator as an editor and plain language evangelist, where he develops and delivers staff training on effective writing.

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3 Responses to "What is Plain Language? Part 5: The Nitty-gritty"

  1. Laura Edlund says:
    February 15, 2022 at 7:27 am

    Thanks, Aaron! This is a wonderful blog and series.

  2. Gael Spivak says:
    February 15, 2022 at 10:15 am

    Thanks, Aaron, for another great post. And for being such a wonderful ambassador for plain language.

    It’s nice to see that last book in your list (the one on ethics).

    By the way, Stephen Heard just published a list of resources for scientific writers. It might be of interest to you and others here.
    https://scientistseessquirrel.wordpress.com/2022/02/15/a-new-compendium-of-resources-for-scientific-writers/

    1. Aaron Dalton says:
      February 15, 2022 at 10:34 am

      Thanks, Gael! I just saw Stephen’s new post this morning as well. Many resources out there!

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